Well, Ive been wanting to do something like this for quite sometime. Over the past 2 months me and my wife and our two children have set out with the camera in hopes to make it happen. This is the first time I have put music and video to my writing so I would love some constructive criticism regarding the cinematography, the writing and the entirety of the piece in general. Looking back on it now, I wished I would have had more experience with sound editing. Some folks online have said the music is too loud and the voice over is too soft while others have told me they could hear it fine. Anyways, since it is related to hunting and fishing I thought I'd share it with yall. Please let me know what y'all think.
You said ya want constructive criticism, then here is one ole country boys opinion. The video and picture quality was great. Editing bothered me a lil in that you draw back the bow and aim and the next scene is of a kid playing in the field. Actually gave me a start. All the folks who say the music is too loud are RIGHT. You have a nice voice and a good country boy accent but after watching twice I still couldnt get all the story. For a first atempt it was amazing and well done and Please do not think this is a put down. I enjoyed it.
I appreciate that Cappy. I posted the words of the voice over in the description in case you'd like to go back and watch along with the words. But thanks so much for the feedback and for taking the time to watch and lend feedback.
Agreed with Cappy. Well done except; That great soft voice of yours did get drowned out a bit with the music. The only other criticism I had was the fire. Not sure how things are in Georgia, but out here in the dry old west we wouldn't think of building a fire amid those dead leaves. That jumped me bad right off and kind of kept me distracted from all the good in the video. Otherwise, well done and very interesting. Keep up the good work.
Grandpa, you aren't the first to point that out, so no worries. As a matter of fact, when we filmed that section of the video it took longer to find enough dry wood for the small fire than it did to get the footage. I would have never been able to get the fire started had I not found an erected piece of pine heart. That section was filmed as the last bit of a heavy snow had started to melt away. But I do understand your concern and I will keep in mind to make it better known in the future. Thanks so much for the kind words and for taking the time to watch.
I wish I had something new to tell you but I just have to agree wholeheartedly with Cappy and Grandpa. The quality of the video was excellent but your voice did get drowned out. You've got a good voice and tone. Like Cappy, I was a bit surprised when you drew the bow and then cut to a kid playing. Honestly I thought "Wow! I guess the hunting laws are a bit different in Georgia than here in Indiana." Over all, I rather enjoyed it. It had a peaceful yet anticipatory feel to it. I always feel like that in the woods. Thanks.
I appreciate that. I hate that I didn't get the voice over levels right because the words, all of them, really are needed for some of the transitions to make sense. Thanks so much for the feedback and for taking the time to watch.
The part I could relate to was when the truck broke down, you got frustrated and walked into the wild. For me that spoke of one's frustration with depending on modern technology to get from point A to point B and deciding to forget about modern technology and go back to the simple way of walking. Society has gotten so techno-dependent they have literally forgotten how to walk. Nowadays many people will drive their vehicles just to go one block down the street to a friends house or to pick up kids from the school bus. It is sickening how lazy people have become. Hardly anyone walks anymore. For years I struggled with my trucks. As soon as I got some money saved a repair bill would come along and wipe it out. That process kept repeating itself. Eventually I sent my last truck off to the junkyard and now commute with a bicycle. The scene where you walked away from a broken down truck spoke to me about how the technology that was supposed to make life easier is so expensive that you have to work your life away to pay for it, which defeats its original purpose of making life easier.
I wanted to do that scene a bit differently. I actually intended on jumping the fence but something happened and I wasn't able to the the right shot. But I really appreciate your comments and I'm glad it was relatable and that it resonated with you. Thanks so much.
